One day a group of blue birds were hanging out in a sunny dry yard behind a farmers farm. As they were flying out in the warm sun, they find a long electricity wire to relax on. When the second one went on to the electricity wire he shoved his brothers face. That's how it started, when they were fighting. Each one of them getting ready to punch each other as they're getting so annoying. Inside they felt ready to burst into flames.
Then a big bird was sitting on the edge. She was kind and sweet. She had a warm lovely smile on her face, she was acting as happy as a person on a rollercoaster. But the little birds were mean and selfish. They were pointing the finger at her and laughing at the same time…
But the big bird did not care, and she still wanted to be their friend, no matter what happens to her. She was waiting for the little birds to see if they would finally feel guilty to what they were doing to her… but the little birds just did not see the real beauty of other. They were cruel and mean.
Then the little birds were walking away. Like they were ignoring the big bird. The big bird's name was Victoria other birds that know her call her Vicky. So Victy flew over to them. And sat in the middle of them.
As she sat down on the electricity wire the electricity wire went down down almost to the ground. Like a chamberlen going down when someone jumps on it. Then once they got down, the big bird swang down but holding herself with her legs. Then some of the little birds started booking Victy's legs…
Then suddenly one of the little blue birds found out that they would bounce into the sky.
So he tried to warn his brother about it, but it was too late. Victy flopped onto the ground. And the group of little blue birds zoomed into the sky. And came down like a waterfall onto the ground. They saw them self naked without any furthers. So Victy laughed and laughed. And the group of blue birds ran and ran far away so they could not be seen by other birds again.
The end
Hi Blessing,
ReplyDeleteI like how you describe the setting, One day a group of blue birds were hanging out in a sunny dry yard behind a farmers farm. That's really good. Maybe try not to put in a uncomfortable word like naked. Here's some words you would like to put in bold, un furry. Anyway keep it up.
thank you for the comment. and yes those words at the end are very good to use in a story like mine, thank you for the idea. and next time i will not put anymore uncomfortable words in my story.... thank you.
DeleteHi Blessing, I like it how you described when they had a fight and how add interesting words.keep it up.
ReplyDeleteWell thankyou very much Finau.
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