All about Blends

 W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Second Draft

The starving of the day

It was a lovely day,  so my parents and I went for a walk around the river bank in the afternoon during September  22nd. Why? Because it was our favorite day to have fun,  I was happy because I was in front of the herd, but my dad was in front of me, because he was the leader of the herd. I was going to celebrate something fun but suddenly as we were walking I smelled  lions ahead of us. ‘

They were chasing me because I was the weakest then, BAM!!! As they dragged me into the water,  suddenly a crocodile appeared and it wanted to eat me too. The lions and the crocodile were having a tug of war with me, the lion’s won. Then the lions pulled me as hard as they could, and they took me on to the dry brown grass. Oh no, they were about to eat me!  Luckily I could see my herd coming to rescue me, then I went under my herd to keep safe. While my herd chased them away, I went back home with my parents.

I felt SO shocked that this day has came to me, it was a big day.

By Blessing

The starving of the day (first draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened?
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First Draft

The Starving Of The Day.

It was a lovely day,  so my parents and I went for a walk around the river bank, in the afternoon during september with my herd. I was happy because I was in front of the herd, but my Dad was in front of me because he was the leader of the herd.

It was a lovely day so we went for a walk, As we were walking I smell  lions ahead of as, they were chasing me because I was the weakest, BAM! As they dragged me into the water, and suddenly I can hear the crocodile want’s to eat me.  As the lions took me on the dry grass, as I can taste and feel my herd is coming, then I see my herd coming to rescue me, as I was safe under my herd.